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Titan

Submitted by Mark on Sun, 2023-10-15 22:16

How to define success?
Or
Importance?
Friends? Lots of friends she had.
A farmer, as I.
She could see herself.
But I failed to see myself through all their eyes
making myself alone.
She could pull the weeds and propagate
the flowers.
I saw her importance and now
cannot let our love go.
She was everyone’s floral spray.

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-10-17 02:03

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the immense love for this person. The symbolism of the floral spray, giving her scent to everyone. She must have had many friends. We are fortunate to have people like this in our lives. They make our lives richer just by knowing them. Yeah, I know the kind of thing you mean; "She could pull weeds and propagate flowers." Where I lost patience and... she would work tirelessly to unravel a knot in a problem. Anyway, good stuff, ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-10-17 08:01

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as Geezer said; "good work"! it flows and sits well.

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Mark

Wed, 2023-10-18 17:07

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Everyone should have a little sister.
Thank you,
Mark

read/comment it's a win win
I was here now I disappear..

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