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FOR THE TIME WILL COME

A time is coming
when men will no longer
beat their wives
but only to cherish and adore them

A time is coming
when women will have the authority
and take charge of the people
and all will be served better

A time is coming
when women's femininity
will now blend into men's masculinity
because she had endured a lot

A time is coming
when women will no longer be
a second-class citizen
but a first-class citizen

For men's leadership has
caused suffering to their freedom of expression
and their constitutional rights
became secretly hijacked

A time will come
when this deep-rooted discrimination
against women and stereotypes
about their appropriate right in the society

All shall come to an end
they shall see the light of the day
their emancipation as women
will be a springboard to assert their rights

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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I find a wistfulness for a better world so well described in this!

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Thanks a bunch for stopping by.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Hi, Jackweb,
I agree with Ray, this amplifies a yearning for a better world. Your final stanza is wonderful - the use of the word "springboard" is key to a strong ending.
Thank you!
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Thanks a bunch esteemed poet!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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hell yes, may this time come and your words manifest an equal and beautiful world to come! Love this piece.

Appreciate your comment! Believe me, it will happen!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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