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Three's A Charm
Three's a charm I've
heard people say but
what if that charm
never comes my
way.
I'm scared that my
charm will be
a negative one
so please God if you
hear me don't let me
be the broken one.
I know I have what it
takes
so please don't let
me down for
goodness sakes.
My tears are all dried up
I doubt I
can cry anymore so
please hold my hand
when they take my
baby out the door.
My pregnancy is
risky so I wish for
death
if I can't feel her
flesh on my flesh.
There is so much
heartache a person
can take
after two children
are gone and one's
at stake.
Lord Jesus I know
you hear my cries
even if those big tear
drops don't fall from
my brown eyes.
Please give me a
miracle think I
deserve just one or
please tell me my life
has ended so I
can be ready to
move on.
Three's a charm I've
heard people say but
what if that charm never
comes my way.
I'm on my knees
begging please take
me away if I'm not
able to see my little
girl on her birthing
day.
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-01-15 15:36
Heart wrenching
I’m wondering if this is autobiographical? My wife is a labor and delivery nurse so I feel really deeply about this subject. I’m a man so obviously it’s outside the realm of my personal experience but nonetheless I empathize. I am truly sorry and I know we as a culture need to bring more attention to this. It must have been very difficult to write this and that probably took a good deal of courage.
Excellent expression of extremely difficult emotions,
Tim
Lavender
Sun, 2023-01-15 18:08
Three's A Charm
Hello, Heather,
I hope all goes well for you and yours.
Lavender
RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-01-16 09:37
Sending all the positive thoughts and well wishes
This was such a brave piece to write and I applaud you for that. As a parent, my heart breaks for your losses and the fear you are feeling right now. Sending you well wishes
~RoseBlack~