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THOSE WHO ARE BRAVE

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2022-04-22 15:27

Are you about you I can't say
But
about self I take great care
so that none ever say
Be brave.

I want to live long
only
because to this world
for once only I shall belong

so I wish to stay strong
till to me
my desires belong
but
then
'twill not be long
when I'm gone
so
Delay
I try to
that blessed day
when for me
YOU
say
Amen
BEGONE
Okay friends

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2022-04-23 13:56

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that I will be happy to see you gone! I will miss your constant presence and hollow cries of I won't be long. Keep living and proclaiming that you are enjoying life, rather than yelling down the tube of life, saying that soon I will be gone. We all go
eventually! I do not think much about "when I am gone", I think about how much more can I get out of what I have left. I gaze upon every baby bird learning to fly, every graceful cat that walks up the path between my neighbor's house and mine, the budding leaves on the berry trees in the yard, and listening to all of the sounds my wife makes in the kitchen. Life is to be enjoyed and used, not to be lost before it is ended. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sat, 2022-04-23 17:22

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YOU MUST REREAD my poem.It was a comment on someones poem Here I miss JESS and IAN
who advised i should not convert a comment to a poem How now I miss them they were RIGHT and now I realise I was abs wrong Thanks for the hammer
NO BELLS TOLL FOR ME

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2022-04-23 14:17

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I agree with Geezer. and I will miss you too!

love & hugs, Cat

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scribbler

Sun, 2022-04-24 01:39

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I also miss the numerous members who are now on the other side. So you be sure and stay on This side for a long time

lovedly

Sun, 2022-04-24 15:40

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My eyes are equally weak don't forget a guy told me at DINNER SO LOVELY
forget your ag e
L O V E D L Y

LOL

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