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They Called Her Satan by: (eddy styx)

I watched her from safety,
a fair pace away.
Her satiny speech drew
my surprised attention.
It was not just her voice,
but the way she used it.
It was hypnotic, in a way
I cannot describe...
I was completely enthralled,
I am not easily taken in
by beauty's allure, but,
her green eyes meeting mine
were soft, large and seductive.
Resting my back to the wall
I steadied myself, finding composure
remembering why I was there.
Her reputation for cruelty
in breaking hearts and trust
I would take her to task
by the very same way.
With rugged smile in place
I swooped into her presence!

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by: eddy styx, my Male alter ego
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My weakness. My kryptonite. My sweetest addiction. If she is the devil, I grovel and fear at her emerald beacons calling me home to temptuous self destruction.

Wife has green eyes. She’s not satan but she’s no angel.

Excellent pace. Total breeze to read.

Tim

emerald-eyed tempestuous! does she happen to be a red-head, too? I have a feeling that she has you squarely where she wants you, lol! and you are very happy to be there.

*ever, eddy

p.s.
Steve has amazing eyes...the color of wood smoke! I am lost to them...

*hugs, Cat

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Of course she’s a ginger and yes she has always had me right where she wanted me.

Tim

The man is bewitched as it should be lol,

I still hate my eyes :S hence the black and white picture, do you remember Cat?

love you J x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I do not remember....being dead for 4 minutes stole this and other things from me :(

*love, your cat

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Hey Eddy, I love this and you kept my interest all the way through.
I do wish that you had taken more of an interest in capitalization
at the beginning of some lines, and you have a typo in the word presence.
All in all, a good piece of work. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I am trash at spelling and English rules. I will attempt to better. I use spell check but this one went uncaught. I really appreciate you taking the time and energy to tell me. thank you for reading and commenting.

can I tempt you on doing a similar piece on all your "other's?"

*ever eddy

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them all at one time or another, but not recently, I guess they could all do with a little up-date.. I may give it a go, but first I have to finish up with part two of the other challenge you issued. It's almost ready, I promise. I have another one I am anxious to post, been working on it for about a week. Maybe I will finish that one today and then finish the music one after that. I keep getting all these ideas and with everything else, there just doesn't seem to be enough hours in the day. Uh oh, time for lunch! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I know what you mean about "idea visitation" lol. I have a few of my own. if that isn't enough, eddy is bugging me to do a music list of his own!

*hugs, Cat
*ever, eddy

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This is not all about the beauty of people. It's about the inner man which is the beauty of the soul. Beauty, an irony of life. There's is more to this than meets the eye. They called her Satan! That's horrendous! I will definitely flew!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

thank you. I am always glad to read your critique as it is helpful to me.

* ever, eddy styx

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I am curious to see how Eddy finishes his task...it doesn't appear she is going to be easy to defeat...well done....

~RoseBlack~

this feels unfinished, doesn't it? I think I must do something about that. thank you for the prompt it is appreciated.

ever, eddy

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we shall see how the story develops...and maybe even I shall be surprised it where it goes, LOL!

*ever, eddy

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I saved the best for last, sigh you know how much I love Eddy that's never been in question.

Is it wrong of me to put a face to this one? it's that good that's what it did, I think it's a brilliant write.

Bravo and send my love to Eddy (hug)

love and biggest hugs J x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

not wrong at all! my hope is to please and entertain...

*ever, eddy styx

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I wasn't sure if I liked the title but I like the same types of topics to write about.
I love the allure of him watching her from a distance in essence, because I'm a huge fan of human behavioral science. All around liked it.

thank you, I am glad you liked it.

*ever, eddy styx

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