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there's nothing but love, my love
she was an American refusenik
and the eye of Ra
once gazed upon her
from dust
she fashioned a solitary word
that flowed
into oceanic verse
and weighted down clouds
to anchor roses to the sky
she burned through images
of what can never be seen
she turned pages blank
she was a blade of grass
aloft
a token of love lost.
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judyanne
Tue, 2012-04-03 10:23
hi anna
she was an American refusenik
and the eye of Ra
once gazed upon her
?she was an American refusenik
upon whom the eye of Ra
once gazed
there are a lot of 'she's in here anna
is there a way of ridding the write of a couple?
i love this though
especially
'weighted down clouds
to anchor roses to the sky' ....
very strong closing words - leave the reader floating....
love judy
xx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Kailashana2
Tue, 2012-04-03 13:19
Exchange *she*, for whatever
Exchange *she*, for whatever word you want, Judy. It's that simple. (Perhaps "Love"?)
I write poetry. Sentence structure and word usage mayhaps be an incongruity....
~A
p.s. Did I say thank you for reading? She was so thoughtless sometimes....
author commentloved
Tue, 2012-04-03 12:30
It's like choking with love....
I am the
beyond
don't rein me in...
loved
Kailashana2
Tue, 2012-04-03 13:22
Yes. Until love spills out,
Yes. Until love spills out, for no reason at all.
~A
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