The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem "Tale of Our Days". Your poem seems to be about a person who is struggling to forget their past love and is reminiscing about the memories they shared with their lover.

The poem has a good flow and rhythm, and the use of metaphors and imagery is impressive. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved.

Firstly, the poem seems to lack clarity in some parts. For example, the line "If I lost for want of a crown I’m glad that I’ve profit" is a bit confusing and it's not clear what it means. It would be helpful to clarify this line or rephrase it to make it more understandable.

Secondly, the poem seems to jump between different thoughts and ideas without a clear transition. It would be helpful to add some connective words or phrases to make the poem flow more smoothly and make the ideas more cohesive.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from some editing to

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what you are trying to say when you write:
"The loose of your virgin lips"
I think that we get the gist of the whole stanza,
but the translation of your language to English is sometimes
uncertain. The English language is very hard for some people,
because many of our words have nearly the same meaning, but
change when used in conjunction with others.

I can see where the meaning of some of the lines you use, as being
a shorter and more compact way of telling the story; unfortunately,
I feel that many people will dismiss them altogether, because of way that they process
our language.

For now, I will concentrate on the tenses, and try to show you what to look for.
The first one, would be: "The seeing of your nakedness".
I would write that line as: The [sight] of your nakedness.

the second one would be:

" The lay that kept me warmth."
The line could go two ways.
The lay that [gave] me warmth or The lay that kept me warm, without the [th].

Some others are:

"The body that made me [aroused]

I lost you as my head touched the sky

I try to [recall] the vivid [memories] of our days

I will never forget you, even as you do me

I'm happy in the love I have for you

I liked the poem's story and the challenge offered in helping to make it
more readable for the English-speaking readers.
As always, this critique is meant to help and not as a strict guide,
you may use any or all of whatever I have given you. ~ Geezer.
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As a piece of written English,
this makes no sense whatsoever.

But as poetry, I love it!

Obi.