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TALE OF LEAVES

Yet another year
dimples the surface of our lives
to float slowly down
and add to the detritus
of time.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
So here I go trying two things I don't do much of : brevity and free verse
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Short and powerful.
Wish I could write short stuff that was this powerful

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Raywhitakerblog.wordpress.com
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Most of my stuff is fairly long. But once in a while to see if I can,I write something short. I am pleased you think well of this one

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I like the title, and, indeed the piece itself,
especially knowing your strong ties to nature that is evident from your book.

Difficult to pull of 'brevity" with a poetic bent,
but I think you've managed it!!

Obi.

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment

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This is just beautiful. I have been experimenting with short poems and love all the connected imagery here.

Most people think the less I write the better lol

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most sing as they compose
what would you stan I wonder

never mind me
I can't hear either
still i want to know what is
detritus
too lazy to open the thesaurus
do scribble here

Loose particles which result fro disintegration. When referring to leaves it can also be called duff. First time I ever used the word in a poem lol. So you can go ahead and get your lazy bones in bed lol

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