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Tale of a Boat and Titanic

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2021-05-24 20:26

Soothingly calm sea
boat sailing so free
sunset is smiling silently
setting at horizon distantly

I await my home
in coal black darkness
shining moon shows me its path

I sleep silently
my oarsman is alert
let there be no sinking
like one saw in Titanic

Captain should not weep
nor not know
how to control
suffering

''Yes women and children first''

but what of mercenaries
guy controller goes berserk
he shoots himself
rest you know
picture go and see

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Tue, 2021-05-25 10:50

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Very enigmatic. I'm not sure that I know of the movie you speak of. Maybe it could give a clue to the rest of your poem?
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lovedly

Tue, 2021-05-25 11:06

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shown to compose a poem .....The sun set and a small boat were shown

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