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Symphony Poeticity

THE BEAUTY
of poetry
such as this
is in itself a mark of symphony
melodious as it is

where even deaf can hear
through the eyes and hearts

tears wash away all our fears
when we read poetry
from our loved ones
near and dear
such as you my poet
supreme
where in the darkness of life
have you left me
serene

on a road as lonely
and
bereft,
of all life
I thought in me
still was left

sing a song of harmony
love and kisses
in between

when we meet
just ask
have we met

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Interactive poetry Lately on few sites I traverse daily I come across poets desperately lonely thinking of themselves only will the world not become void when it of them becomes devoid Such folks take my heart away I on their behalf for them do pray Have mercy poets any way they are shallow in a shocking way
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Comments

Great poem, dear Lovedly

Lines six and seven are unclear.

May I suggest instead something perhaps similar in spirit,

where even deaf can hear
through the eyes and hearts

Just a suggestion.

IRiz

will do tomorrow
eyes drooping
since morning
thanks Irene and good night

author comment

where even deaf can hear
through the eyes and hearts

great

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I really felt the tone of love, like sun rays in my heart, from reading this gem. There’s so much egotism emitted it’s a freshness not always felt when we meet people on the street.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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Of Collaboration
I am
FRIGHTFUL
Can't match
FREESTYLE
as all here are mostly
WESTERNIZED

I am all like mixed fruity -Jam

Any way my thanks

author comment

Your wonderful

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

Neopoet Community

Hello Lovedly,
Where have you disappeared?
I did not hear
from you for almost a week!
Are you writing something big?
I just thought
that you might want to know,
that you and your poems
are missed.

IRiz

you cross my page
without a personal rage
I am of poetry just a
crumpled page

do read mine
MILITARY poem
Contest one
now posted

Thanks for your diligence
Lady Irene

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Use brittle page, I suggest. I love this word.
Okay I will check.i don't see it on your page.
Perhaps later.

IRiz

will be better than little
LOL
brittle then twill be

brit·tle
ˈbridl/
adjective
adjective: brittle

1.
hard but liable to break or shatter easily.
"her bones became fragile and brittle"
synonyms: breakable, fragile, delicate; splintery;
formal frangible

author comment

good thoughts expressed in this poem. Personally I feel you can do away with the last 2 stanzas or replace them to be in sync / progression with the earlier ones...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I had a guy in mind
who was showing his
you know what

and if i do shed the two stanzas '
it would appear my Fatigues
also fell off

lol

believe me '
this world loves to see nudes
come to Niagara
You have seen

author comment

I is here and did read ,
It was music to my ears
So there you have no fears
Just be as you always are,
Yours Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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