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sympathetic gesture in pennies

perched upon a pallet
each powerful pull
prompting further
his pickled pitch of pep

all promises
proclamations
played out
and unproductive

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A sound, effective piece, elegantly written. Great title.
proclomations [proclamations].

Hope to see more of you.

cheers,
Jess
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