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The sweet silver swallow

Submitted by Edward nigma on Mon, 2020-10-12 06:13

The sweet silver swallow
flys for tomorrow
Trying to leave all
It’s sorrow
behind.
For it soars
Towards the sun’s
Scintillating
Gates that holds
The stream of
future’ hopes.
and all
Past’s unaccomplished
Completely demolished
Dreams.

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c lynn brooks

Mon, 2020-10-12 17:01

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well now what an improvement I see in your use of stanzas your poem is just lovely title is strong and your first line pulls that reader in to want to continue reading. well done!!

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Edward nigma

Mon, 2020-10-12 17:34

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I hope your doing fine in this horrid time of mass hysteria

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Edward nigma

Tue, 2020-10-13 10:27

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i hope your doing fine in this horrid time of mass hysteria

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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