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Sweet Little Sister
Tweetie birds tweet, in the bushes;
it's music to my ear;
sitting outside, the hospital patio,
they called for a mate, loud in my ear.
I'm tired, worn down, trying to work;
I pushed forward through the depression;
I do not know, how to think;
will she get better, or slip away.
Past disappointments, has me bitter;
I'm unwilling to communicate, all my feelings;
like daggers and missiles, my words spewed;
alone in mind and heart, I find it hard to cope;
Tho I followed the path of least resistance;
the evils of life appear in my view;
sowers reap and reapers sow;
success is mine in the vortex.
All the while, in my subconscious, tweetie birds
called and mated in the bushes;
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weirdelf
Fri, 2017-07-14 14:04
Wow, this is so tricky and compelling!
I nearly stopped reading after the first stanza, might have if a lesser poet, I've done a reading-
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/sweet-little-sister-by-barbara-writes
with your permission I'll post it to our Neopoet.com Facebook page.
cheers,
Jess
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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2017-07-14 18:12
Well done
You have my permission
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