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SWEET BLOODED ME

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2021-12-12 21:44

All run after me
my knees
are now
extremely weak

let me fall and bleed
they'll suck it

my blood is too sweet

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
As life ebbs body curls
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Mon, 2021-12-13 08:55

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as though you are being stalked? Do you feel like you have run as far as you can with your poetry? That people are running you down to suck the life's blood of your work from you? We all feel that way sometimes. You are still pertinent, don't worry, be happy! Geez.
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lovedly

Mon, 2021-12-13 10:47

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no worry,

am
still happy!

Geez.
thanks glad you screen me
.

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Jackweb

Mon, 2021-12-13 21:23

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I think I need a chisel to break it apart. LoL!
Very apt and highly condensed.

"my blood is too sweet" that's a terrific imagery.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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