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Susan & Stan (Scribbler) emulate your favorite poet contest

Susan & Stan (Scribbler)

on a country dirt road
cutting into the autumn wood
they strolled hand-in-hand enjoying
Indian Summer whilst they could

in the dusk of the day
with the dark come creeping,
the last rays of sun
on the horizon seeping.

soon fades over the hill
a blend of colors weep
as the wind moves the weeds
past them into shadows deep.

this side of the wood, in a meadow
grass hoppers and crickets wake
every little bug and critter adds
to the symphony of sound they make

Susan and Stan hesitate, stopping and turn in their tracks,
enjoying a moment of reverence for this "together" time
a squeezing of hands as they face each other smiling
joyous in each others company in a moment sublime.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Are we supposed to do a poem like our favorite poet on neopoet or of all time?

Kisses,
Vivi

thank you...he is a classic!

*hugs, Cat

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anyone you like! If it happens to be someone on Neo. or a famous poet or even an obscure one, it matters not! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

how did you like my poem? did I capture Scribbler's style?

*hugs, Cat

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I think you did! I like it and I think Stan will like it too. Hugs, ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

for reading and commenting. I hope Scribbler likes it. I put a lot of thought and feeling into the choice. I see Scribbler as a classic poet, his writings are eloquent and easy to read. thanks for the vote of confidence!

*hugs, Cat

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about Susan one can't say
as stan only loves
says he
who
Susan
Cats
who else lol

I think this captures Stan's style and that he will be pleased to have you emulate him. Good use of imagery and rhyme. :)

~RoseBlack~

thank you for reading an commenting...as yet he hasn't seen it. you are becoming a real asset to Neopoet :)

*hugs, Cat

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I am not as experienced with critique but always happy to give a review and highlight likes and dislikes :)

~RoseBlack~

given generously and with a pure heart...and that is good enough...a fair gift!

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To be considered a favorite is a rare honor. I especially enjoyed your including Susan as she inspires me in so many ways

I'm glad you liked it. tell Susan "Hello" for me!

*hugs, Cat

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