Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Susan & Stan (Scribbler) emulate your favorite poet contest
Susan & Stan (Scribbler)
on a country dirt road
cutting into the autumn wood
they strolled hand-in-hand enjoying
Indian Summer whilst they could
in the dusk of the day
with the dark come creeping,
the last rays of sun
on the horizon seeping.
soon fades over the hill
a blend of colors weep
as the wind moves the weeds
past them into shadows deep.
this side of the wood, in a meadow
grass hoppers and crickets wake
every little bug and critter adds
to the symphony of sound they make
Susan and Stan hesitate, stopping and turn in their tracks,
enjoying a moment of reverence for this "together" time
a squeezing of hands as they face each other smiling
joyous in each others company in a moment sublime.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
Viviana Smith
Fri, 2022-04-01 17:04
Are we supposed to do a poem
Are we supposed to do a poem like our favorite poet on neopoet or of all time?
Kisses,
Vivi
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-04-01 18:29
hey Vivi,
thank you...he is a classic!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Geezer
Sat, 2022-04-02 09:59
You can use...
anyone you like! If it happens to be someone on Neo. or a famous poet or even an obscure one, it matters not! ~ Geez.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-04-02 11:11
dear Geez,
how did you like my poem? did I capture Scribbler's style?
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Geezer
Sun, 2022-04-03 00:18
Yes...
I think you did! I like it and I think Stan will like it too. Hugs, ~ Geez.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-04-03 08:34
thanks Geez,
for reading and commenting. I hope Scribbler likes it. I put a lot of thought and feeling into the choice. I see Scribbler as a classic poet, his writings are eloquent and easy to read. thanks for the vote of confidence!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lovedly
Wed, 2022-04-06 15:45
scribbler has his own way
about Susan one can't say
as stan only loves
says he
who
Susan
Cats
who else lol
RoseBlack
Thu, 2022-04-07 09:37
Hi Cat
I think this captures Stan's style and that he will be pleased to have you emulate him. Good use of imagery and rhyme. :)
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-04-07 09:41
dear Rose Black,
thank you for reading an commenting...as yet he hasn't seen it. you are becoming a real asset to Neopoet :)
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
RoseBlack
Thu, 2022-04-07 10:02
Thank you Cat
I am not as experienced with critique but always happy to give a review and highlight likes and dislikes :)
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-04-07 10:14
they are...
given generously and with a pure heart...and that is good enough...a fair gift!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
scribbler
Sun, 2022-04-10 11:02
Hi Cat
To be considered a favorite is a rare honor. I especially enjoyed your including Susan as she inspires me in so many ways
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-04-10 11:06
dear Scribbler,
I'm glad you liked it. tell Susan "Hello" for me!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.