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SUNDAY Those out there should review

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2022-09-29 23:01

An autumn leaf
be not alone
all are lonely

somewhere in the vastness
of eternity
someone calls out suddenly
still we say wait
time hasn't come yet
loneliness vanishes

unknown come in one’s dreams
screams
where have you been
one says
are you asking
a strewn autumn leaf

invisible one smiles
alongside
now 'tis autumn
there is no surprise
hope you too will be
some day
flying about
side beside
till then in my mind
reside

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Last few words:

Have you ever observed in dreams dead never speak yet they convey Slowly silently hear me

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2022-09-30 21:34

Dreams

I don’t remember many of my dreams. I do find this one particularly interesting. People passing away like leaves falling brushing past each other. Dreams dissipating into consciousness as we wake up like trees into bare winter. I like it.

Tim

lovedly

Fri, 2022-09-30 23:17