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Suddenness of Life (ORIGINALITY)

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2019-10-13 21:15

Suddenness of Life

Yesterday we spoke

This morning he did not call
day before
he excused to say

I am going for my walk

Time just comes
lapses

Spiritual or NOT
He has gone
Autumn is just on

My only friend
philosopher guide
and
master
more than a brother

He said when he is
gone
he will never be
reborn

I know
we all have to follow
the same route

Last few words: 
No no thing in particular this is actual thanks
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Eumolpus

Mon, 2019-10-14 22:27

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For me amen does not at all work and takes away from an otherwise good ending we all follow the same route. The poem is not a prayer and does not need the extra note that you the poet agree with yourself

Otherwise a poignant poem filled with a sadness

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

lovedly

Mon, 2019-10-14 23:10

lovedly's picture

It happened
yesterday

removed the last word
as so diligently advised
thanks

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lovedly

Tue, 2019-10-15 16:23

lovedly's picture

Resume life After Two Days
First day cry
for the one
who has gone by

he leaves all behind
bereft
sad
just too bad

The second day
pray to Divine
keep him now happy
he alone wanted to be
with thee

Third day onward
have a drink in his memory
and
resume living normally

Life can not now standstill
no one throughout eternity will
searching an apparition
one's time kill

life cannot be stilled
he came like others
and
did go happily fulfilled

we all are in an indefinite
QUEUE
to
FOLLOW

keep this in mind
coz there is nothing known
what lies beyond
beyond

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lovedly

Thu, 2019-10-17 12:13

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We knew not of our arrival
how can we know our departure
I have completed all my assignments
and
they say can't apply euthanasia

I have no more responsibility
towards any one
no favors to return
but shall do nothing wrong
till my natural turn

who on this earth
can ever know
when the final whistle shall blow
and
when you are gone
none will know

the candle flame on the stand
will continue to flicker and glow,
till someone comes
and
off it does go one blow

till then let's await our turn
there is plenty of place in heaven
there should be no hurry to go
but
then who knows tomorrow

Au revoir till the sunrises again

(Its too cold in the distant heaven
minus 300 degrees they relayed )

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