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Subterfuge

The earth ain’t round it’s flat
That’s no lie, it’s fact
How do I know I hear you ask
Well I stood at the edge, looked down
Saw the burning floor through the slits in my mask

Cover stories, secrets, and deceit
Our thoughts sent to war
To make truth from the lies to make our lives of slavery complete

There is no truth, it’s all been removed
Fucked with, messed up and turned upside-down
Twisted, stretched, burnt, and drowned

There is no truth, it’s been distorted
Ripped up, spat on, and turned inside-out
Squashed and pulled, beyond any doubt

The moon isn’t there it’s fake
It’s no lie, make no mistake
How do I know I hear you ask
Well I looked up, stared long at its face
Saw the hologram flicker through the slits in my mask

Cover-ups, secrets, and deceit
Our thoughts sent to war
To make lies from the truth to make our lives of servitude complete

The earth ain’t round, it’s flat and Heaven isn’t white it’s black
so what does life mean when our minds are full of dreams that
reality tears away from the seams and all that is heard is our
agonising screams and so we travel the bridge of broken
beams and thus we fall from our dreams that are torn from
their seams and all that is heard are our intensified screams

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Comments

as a great heavy-metal rap! I mean it! I could hear it in my head as I read it through the second time. Wow!
Not my normal fare or tempo, but this jumped right off the page at me. Nice work! ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Well, amongst the goodly writerly folk
of ol' neopoet,

Here lies the body
o' poet, Anon.
broke wind once.
and then was- gone.

I think everything after
"Cover-ups, secrets, and deceit
Our thoughts sent to war"
is superfluous,
other than that this is great, well, "for me"

ob,,,eeeee.

I write this as a lyric hence the repetition of the theme throughout. I’m unable to edit it to show stanza’s apart from chorus etc so it can read off in the stale format Neopoet provides.

Thanks for dropping in.

Regards

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

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I laughed all the way through reading this! I don't know if you meant to be funny, or not. please forgive me, I've been very sick and still not right in my head. I love you. a very good write!

*Big Hugs, Sis

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You laugh as much as you like! It want written as comedy but hey! It gave you a smile; my job is done here.

Love

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

author comment

I've been pretty sick the past week. went to urgent care emergency medical/ I don't have covid. but flu. so I am not quite myself. sorry

love, Sis

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hope you are feeling better.

Don't get me going on about flu! Isn't it odd that flu disappeared completely during Covid which had the same symptoms...was it flu all the time & the need to vaccinate us all with an un-tested chemical was the plan all the time?? If so, what the hell did they inject into us?

I shall try not to break my ankle as I jump off my soap box! LOL!

Be well!

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

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I am glad to see this resurfacing for newbies to discover!

*much love, Sis

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I didnt knowingly resurrect it; I was trying to see if I could get Neopoet AI to comment but it seems you have to post only brand new ones to get it.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

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