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Spellbound
Nary a pin drop could be heard
As the sun stripped down her firey rays
Giving way to the moon's seductive glow
Body and heart open to show
Placing the athame upon the altar
Black petals falling against its wood surface
Sandalwood and saffron engulfed in fire
Floating with the wind to her desire
Speaking his name, she called above
Let these words find her love
And place him in her arms so tight
So mote it be
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Seren
Fri, 2023-02-17 01:23
Dear Carrie
So Mote it Be.
This is an incantation to love and for love.
It's gorgeous, enchanting and I wouldn't change a word.
You can't change a spell once it's cast Eh? ;)
Love and biggest hugs so mote it be Jayne xox
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-02-17 05:09
Thank you Jayne
Just a little spell for love...maybe someone is listening...glad you enjoyed
~RoseBlack~
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2023-02-17 05:43
Witchcraft
Excellent job weaving all the elements together. Obviously I’m into pagan beliefs and so this one is special.
Tim
RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-02-17 07:44
Hi Tim
Thank you for the read and comment...I still remember much of what I learned many years ago regarding paganism and am a strong believer. Glad you enjoyed.
~RoseBlack~
author commentCandlewitch
Fri, 2023-02-17 05:57
dear Carrie,
I must echo all that has been said! this is so very enchanting!
* brightest of blessings, Cat
*
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RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-02-17 07:45
Thank you Cat
Glad you enjoyed! I am trying to dig deeper with my writing.
~RoseBlack~
author commentvandiemenspeak
Fri, 2023-02-17 07:52
Blimey.
Blimey.
"As the sun stripped down her firey rays"
Now that's a memorable line. I am a fan of WB Yeats more more esoteric works.
I do love the tone of this, yet find myself profoundly lost.
This ridiculous device, in the southern hemisphere finds me me, scrambling to devine that strange beauty you created. I will have to return.
Kindest regards
Chris.
Chris Hall - Tasmania
Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.
RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-02-17 08:21
Hi Chris
Thank you for the read and comment. I am glad you enjoyed and look forward to your return and further assessment.
~RoseBlack~
author commentRoseBlack
Fri, 2023-02-17 08:22
Thank you
Glad you enjoyed! I am working on digging deep and expanding my vocabulary.
~RoseBlack~
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