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Submitted by lou on Fri, 2010-11-05 23:09

I was an obnoxious bitch,
a malignant witch,
to ever treat you so.

Dearest friend,
I'm with you till the end,
our relationship rules,

Forgive and forget,
please don't poor scorn on,
my regret.

A pal and a mate,
our interaction is so great.
Please don't hate me.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
To someone very dear to me, sorry if I was rude. Lou xx

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judyanne

Sat, 2010-11-06 00:38

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i'm sure no-one could resist forgiving you for what ever you have done/said....
one little thing:
'Dearest friend I'm with you till then end' (did you mean 'the end'?)

i love the 'obnoxious bitch malignant witch' bit

love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

lou

Sat, 2010-11-06 02:05

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Let's hope they do forgive me

Love Lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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lou

Sat, 2010-11-06 02:08

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Lets hope your right .

Much love Lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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lou

Sat, 2010-11-06 02:20

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You made me cry.

Much love Lou

Xxxx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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lou

Sat, 2010-11-06 07:09

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I toned it down a little, it got a little too flowery.

thanks for the nice comments.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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magics02

Sat, 2010-11-06 08:59

I so missed you also here and your asking for a forgiveness and I have pardoned you. LMAO just kidding honey. Don't be so hard on yourself, we all make mistakes and yes I agree with all the others you are one sweet woman here and do not forget it. I hope you are doing fine and I will be on more in the upcoming weeks. I missed you alot dear friend.

Love and Hugs
Mona
xoxoxo

lou

Sat, 2010-11-06 10:36

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I missed you to. A. little embaressed by the poem now.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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ziggy

Sat, 2010-11-06 09:08

LOUISE your such a good sort
I got a feeling there was no need for this
but it did give me a giggle xxxxxxxxxxxx zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

lou

Sat, 2010-11-06 10:38

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Why giggle?

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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scribbler

Sun, 2010-11-07 10:48

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One can be wrong without being a bitch or witch but the sentiment is obviously deeply felt......scribbler

lou

Sun, 2010-11-07 12:46

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Glad you liked it, it was an exercise in humility, every one needs that now and again.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Hooded Stranger

Tue, 2010-11-09 13:52

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this is raw and gutsy. I think you captured the moment perfectly.

You'll be forgiven...I know you will,

HS

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lou

Tue, 2010-11-09 23:27

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Awwww thanks, my friends are of great importance to me.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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