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Some Other Time

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2023-02-06 04:35

Some other time
my eyes are freshly wet
do await some more time

I now no more can mime
it's late in the night
need more time

sleep over powers me
let the dawn rise
and overnight
I will become
may be wise

may be not
if comes early my demise
then my soul shall rise

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2023-02-06 05:43

Yes

It’s like the childhood bedtime prayer except all dressed up in Lovedly fabric.

I like it,
Tim

lovedly

Mon, 2023-02-06 06:13

Very kind of you RA

As you traverse my way
I sleep nude
as and when
childhood spent
now no lament

loved's
amen
lovedly
has no repent

author comment

Geezer

Mon, 2023-02-06 09:52

Lovedly, lovedly...

make sure you at least cover yourself before inviting us to come visit you in the night! LoL
~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

lovedly

Mon, 2023-02-06 12:10