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Solo Sailor

Hello sailor solo still
I am forever in search
of those who wish to
be remembered
when we want to

many then run away and say
I’d not meant it that way

so be gone like a summer's eve
many who love me
the way I do
only need remember me
how passionate
I still can be

just don't forget it
that's what I'd meant
when I said remember me

Well friend now do you see
what I'd meant it to be

a solo sailor still
is what even now I be

now come along
if you still want it with me
solo still
I will
continue to be

as

anonymous you say
you are
Lovedly

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
3194 reads Composed in 2010 A sailor solo wanted to pass a message around... though 68 he was still around
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how I wish
jess reads it

author comment

but you can be certain of this- I will never critique any of your work that pleads for attention, it lacks dignity and it is frankly embarrassing m'dear. Nor poems about Neopoet, and very seldom poems about poetry.

I'll make you a deal. Write a new poem. Think about it, work on it to make it one of your best. PM me when you post it and I will critique it. If you respond to that critique and edit it, not necessarily with my suggestions but in some way to improve it, then I will continue to critique your works, on the same conditions, no more than once a month and not if you post more than one a week. I maintain that none but the foremost geniuses can compose more than one poem of quality per week.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

though my time is plenty
shall abide with you fully

author comment

If your time is limited all the more reason to make the best of it and not post shit.

Be remembered for your gems, my friend, not for your drivel.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

I love the poem, but didn't actually get the flow.

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

critique means
correcting
advising
improving
rewriting etc as you feel
chiori

author comment

A pretty piece of poetry, well in this life we live not everyone can remember a friend after a long time of staying together but the truth is "a good work never dies" thanks for this one lovedly.

For five and a half years or more Neopoet has been there for you, giving of our time and thought to read your work and offer feedback.

Don't you think that in your remaining time you could show a little gratitude and give something back? I have nominated you to the AC, where you can help develop and implement policy. Accept the nomination.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

what a surprise
you don on my shoulders
what am I to say?
But if I am not worthy enough
kick me jess

author comment

but if you do you will be expected to communicate by email in plain English.
Start thinking about all the wonderful ways you could improve Neopoet but, and this is a big but, any ideas you have must be able to be implemented by members through policy. No structural changes at all, not the teensiest, weensiest little one. Andrew is busy building the lab and running the elections.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

shall try later

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