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OF SOLITUDE

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2022-06-26 20:28

Realities of life we all must face
down from Adam to Eve
to the end of human race.
if you must want anyone
to share your grief
the association will be brief

so let the world praise you
for in solitude you find a sigh
I can't say why

the sadness that prevails today
will one day go away
loneliness in utter pain
must be borne
without becoming insane

let solitude be your innate partner
who knows what will happen next
will you leave the rest or become bereft

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Mon, 2022-06-27 06:59

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I usually don't find much of anything that
needs to be deleted or altered in any way,
but I think that you should just get rid of
the last two lines of the first stanza.

They really aren't making a whole lot of sense.

The same goes for the lines:
A doc can only inject in you
tolerate him will you

~ Geez.
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lovedly

Mon, 2022-06-27 12:01

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thanks Gee Geez now
GEEZER
I C

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Geezer

Mon, 2022-06-27 15:09

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earned the right to call me Gee, Geez, or Geezer, just don't call me late to supper! Lol

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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lovedly

Mon, 2022-06-27 15:26

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yes ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ
be happy with GLEE

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