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Snowdrops ~ Ladies of Loveliness

The winter-proof snowdrops are blooming,
reminders that springtime is looming.
They brave the harsh breeze that is blowing;
in bleakest mid-winter they're growing!

In Latin, Galanthus Nivalis;
(to love them, you don’t need to know this)
‘Milk Flower of the Snow’s’ the translation;
from Promised Land brought to this nation.

All clouded in folklore and fable,
like Adam and Eve, Cain and Abel,
whose tears were all shed in the garden;
in Eden they begged heaven's pardon!

So, angels of mercy took pity,
from snowflakes made flowers so pretty:
sweet, shy, sturdy blooms, bright with beauty,
all destined, by God, for this duty:

to symbolise hope, beyond sorrow,
of new world of wonder, tomorrow,
where hearts will be warmed and unfrozen
by ladies of loveliness chosen.

The beautiful snowdrops are blooming:
reminders that springtime is looming!
Cruel winter, they tell us, is ending;
sweet solace of springtime is pending!

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in the telling the story of snowdrops!
I liked the story of tears shed in the Garden of Eden.
I never heard that one before. Nice job of rhyming!
~ Geezer.
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I liked the rhyming paired with the theme. Interesting subject matter, it draws readers in

"To fly is to fall."

So I’m enamored with this painter who works in watercolor and does these amazing floral works. She love to paint snow drops. I kept seeing her work when I read along. I learned a lot reading this poem. Thanks for all the interesting information concerning the symbolism and history. Fantastic job

Tim

Many thanks, Tim. Thank you, once more, for taking the time to read and comment on my poor little rhymes. I appreciate it truly.

KBloor

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