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SNIPPET
Open the door
stick out my arm
no jacket today
morning air is tending warm.
Step outside
breath fresh air in
along with pollen's tang
sneezes begin.
Sneeze a bit, cough a bit
then lift my eyes to rising sun,
walk to my truck and get inside.
Spring work day has begun.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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jane210660
Sun, 2016-05-08 11:27
This reminds me of home and
This reminds me of home and my life, so I find it familiar. It's a snapshot, that brief moment in time, which in its self, is unremarkable, yet it creates an enduring memory. Jx
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scribbler
Sun, 2016-05-08 15:19
Hello
Thanks for dropping by. Most of my stuff is a bit lengthy so once in a while I force myself to do something shortish lol. Pleased you enjoyed this venture in semi-brevity.........stan
author commentjane210660
Sun, 2016-05-08 15:50
Sorry, I should have added, I
Sorry, I should have added, I like it very much. Jx
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scribbler
Sun, 2016-05-08 15:56
LOL
No apology needed, just glad you dropped in.......stan
author commentalidzain
Sun, 2016-05-08 18:53
Stan
good one.
Alid
scribbler
Thu, 2016-05-12 18:06
greetings
Sorry for late reply. real world is extremely hectic right now. thanks for coming by...........stan
author commentRula
Mon, 2016-05-09 00:07
A perfect
read to put a morning smile Stan.
Beware the pollens!
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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scribbler
Thu, 2016-05-12 18:08
Hi Rula
Apologies for late reply. Been busier than a 2 tailed cat in a room full of rocking chairs. Always good to bring a smile to somebody's face ..........stan
author commentmand
Fri, 2016-05-13 03:51
Hi Stan
:) This poem lifted my spirits this morning - especially as I've woken to a bright warm day. I hope we have many more to come - as well as more of your poems. :)
Title is just about right I'd say!
Keep safe - you and family - :)
Love Mand xxx
Ps that may not be so good for the cough's and sneezes though - phh
scribbler
Fri, 2016-05-13 20:00
Hi Mandy
Always good to know I've lifted somebody's spirits.Thanks for dropping by and best to you and yours......stan
author commentlovedly
Fri, 2016-05-13 07:04
short and sweet a rare retreat..... Stan
@ 62
after running about a grandson
shows you are a tired mason,
driving to do the
jungle cementation
short yes
but sweet
scribbler
Fri, 2016-05-13 20:02
Hi Loved
I figured folks were likely getting tired of my writing such long stuff so I'm pleased you liked this shorty lol........stan
author commentlovedly
Sat, 2016-05-14 02:17
u r always welcome
i will read you
if you start on earth and reach the moon
spreading your lovely ink
as all will love to have a share of it too
god bless you
Stan!~
judyanne
Sat, 2016-05-14 07:50
a snippet
The perfect title -
Nice little write that had me off to the truck with you - but I get hay fever too, so... thanks for that lol
Short n sweet
Just like me
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
scribbler
Sat, 2016-05-14 18:13
Hi Shorty
Sometimes seems the less I write the better people like it lol. Always good to see you have come by........stan
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