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In Slumber

In slumber,
a soul took flight,
to embrace
a new adventure.

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In waking
The souls learning
Begins
Take care young traveller and teach the children if they do not know, but also learn from the children as they are closer to the Spirit.
Good words there young poet it now needs a poem written around those words,
Yours as always Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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Alid

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I really like it Khalid.
I also have learned slumber as a new word.
Thank you for sharing brother.

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Glad you liked it, sis. You're welcome.

Alid

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