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Sixty-Something
Assembled over the years,
I was pieced together by many things.
Among them, wounds that pierced me
without blood, but disfigured me for a time.
Scars and abrasions remain,
from loss and from love.
If I’m fortunate though,
another compress will be within reach,
ready to be applied, when needed,
by my experienced hands.
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Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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San Francisco Bay Area - USA
Favorite Poets
Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)
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Seren
Thu, 2023-02-23 12:06
Dear Michael
A poem that all can find a little of themselves in, especially as we age, resilience and always going forward is all we can do while carrying the burdens of life.
I really loved this one I see nothing that needs to be changed.
Really well done!
Kind Regards Seren
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Michael Anthony
Thu, 2023-02-23 16:16
Thank you Seren! Glad you
Thank you Seren! Glad you liked it and I really appreciate you taking the time to stop by. I tweaked it a bit per Lavender's excellent suggetsion. Hopefully it worked.
Best
Michael Anthony
author commentLavender
Thu, 2023-02-23 14:35
Sixty-Something
Hi, Michael,
This causes me to pause and take inventory of my life - sometimes it feels very short, and other times if feels as if I've been around a thousand years. So much loss and love as your poem gently reveals. I wonder about the word "hand" being so close to the beautiful image of "experienced hands." Stood out just a bit to me. I am also sixty-something, and I sure appreciate your poem.
L
Michael Anthony
Thu, 2023-02-23 16:11
Thank you for your suggestion
Thank you for your suggestion L! I do have a terrible habit of repeating words in my poems (to my everlasting annoyance with myself - lol!). I have edited it with, perhaps, a better line - hopefully...
FYI - One of the best features of this online community is the collabrative support from others - awesome!
Best
Michael Anthony
author commentLavender
Thu, 2023-02-23 17:25
Hello, Michael,
Looks great! I can relate so well to your poem, as I do with most wonderful poems you write.
L
Candlewitch
Thu, 2023-02-23 14:52
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me too! I love it!
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Michael Anthony
Thu, 2023-02-23 16:12
Thank you Cat! Best
Thank you Cat!
Best
Michael Anthony
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