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Sitting With Anger

Submitted by RoseBlack on Wed, 2023-01-04 22:08

I sat with my anger
Long enough to listen
For what I was feeling
Wasn't really anger at all

She introduced herself
As loneliness
Abandonment and grief
Emotions I buried deep

Triggered by false hope
Knowing he was way too kind
Realizing I am the same foolish girl
Who leads with love blind eyes

I told her I was tired
Told her I needed it to end
Anger smiled and nodded
Then put the razor in my hand

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Free verse
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Jackweb

Wed, 2023-01-04 22:44

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Loneliness has a huge effects on people's lives. It would definitely stir series of thoughts that bangs in our ear. But, you too have the supremacy over your thoughts. I felt this piece! Excellent delivery!
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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-01-04 23:15

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Certainly does play havoc with your thoughts, especially when you keep making the same mistakes over and over. But you are correct...we do have the upper hand with our thoughts...sometimes...

~RoseBlack~

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Lavender

Wed, 2023-01-04 23:05

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just need to know that you are ok...

RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-01-04 23:16

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Using writing as an outlet for some really tough emotions these days. Thank you for asking.

~RoseBlack~

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Lavender

Wed, 2023-01-04 23:35

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Hoping the very best for you, and that these tough emotions move aside and make room for peace and comfort.
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Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-01-05 06:56

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loneliness is a tough master with talons. but I have to say she is also inspirational! and some truly great poetry has been born by this Bitch! yours included.

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RoseBlack

Thu, 2023-01-05 11:08

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And/or stupidity...I think I am falling into both these categories of late. But you are correct, some fabulous poetry has come from such feelings.

~RoseBlack~

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M4GG0TM3NT4L

Thu, 2023-01-05 12:13

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This really resonates with me!! like, a lot. the flow is really nice and the wording is vivid. I think i know what the razor means, and if im right, i'm sorry that you feel that way.

-m4gg0t was here

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RoseBlack

Thu, 2023-01-05 14:16

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Thank you for the read and comment. Tough emotions are exactly as they sound and writing is a safe outlet. Thanks for stopping by.

~RoseBlack~

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-01-06 07:45

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Maybe take a page from the book of Killer? Killer was born of the need to process my feelings of frustration in not being able to control my self-destructive behavior. He expresses the moral outrage of the norms, while satisfying his own anger. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Fri, 2023-01-06 03:11

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But I can't seem to drum up another identity at the moment. I am having a hard enough time with the one I have. It's funny that anger is really the least of what I feel when I look at it. It is more confusion and grief and disappointment in myself. Perhaps there is an alter ego in there somewhere.

~RoseBlack~

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-01-06 07:52

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It's not easy being smart, funny, and homicidal, but we can give you tips. ~ Geez, Killer, and Sir Gee.
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RoseBlack

Fri, 2023-01-06 07:58

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I seen to have lost my edge these days...let my guard down and the b**** go away. Maybe I need to bring her back....

~RoseBlack~

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-01-06 08:38

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it might be liberating! Maybe she could be a maneater! LoL Then her and Killer could have something in common other than electric guitars. LoL
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RoseBlack

Fri, 2023-01-06 10:30

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Although she does enjoy how Killer plays the guitar!

~RoseBlack~

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Rula

Fri, 2023-01-06 14:03

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everyone got bad or tough times every now and then. I could never put these times on paper.
I think you are lucky enough to have some at least so well-expressed.
Hope all those feelings to leave sooner.

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RoseBlack

Fri, 2023-01-06 23:00

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Writing is surely my outlet for such difficult feelings. It is a bit of a catharsis for me. Thank you for your kind words and read.

~RoseBlack~

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