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Sitting

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Tue, 2023-02-21 07:12

Sitting with feelings
A room with four walls
Cracked plaster ceiling
From which the dust falls

Frightened paralysis
Manic discord
Dark hiding hole
Or a fleeting reward

Give it a night
Then give it a day
Give it a week
When there’s naught left to say

Taste disappointment
Which spoils my cup
Spirits are down
But I’ll keep my head up

Ever long we amble
Ensnared by destiny
Endless little outcomes
Yet our will is free

Now the door is open
The walls disintegrate
I sit beside a river of thoughts
I’ll need to contemplate

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-02-21 10:35

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Hi, Tim,
When reading your poem, I feel as if I'm sitting through a storm - and then it peacefully passes. Very affecting.
Thanks,
L

Leslie

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:38

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I loved this because it causes me to reflect on my own struggles in life. Isn't this just the way life goes, especially
when you are chronically ill?

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-21 13:45

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I know the feeling well. A very articulate piece here. I sense the discord and the need for peace. This port is always open in any storm. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-22 09:49

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should I worry? you know you can vent to me, I hope?

these lines:

Now the door is open
The walls disintegrate
I sit beside a river of thoughts
I’ll need to contemplate

they resonate.

*hugs, Cat & eddy

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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-22 17:36

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This poem resonates...I seem to find myself doing a lot of that these. Another brilliantly written poem! Well done!

~RoseBlack~

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