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Silliest ME
Silliest person ever born
under the fiery sun and lovely moon
I could not understand her invite
all alone when so very young
Today I weep at my folly of my failing
in not accepting what she was then offering
life lapsed into oblivion
now I realise why from the top I fall
like a senseless Niagara Fall
my life would have been
like red grapes in life's vine but
it was unimaginably silly of me
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
scribbler
Mon, 2022-01-31 10:38
a bit vague as to intent......or maybe I
just haven't been awake long enough lol
lovedly
Mon, 2022-01-31 12:46
stan you can think even when asleep
This piece speaks of school guy girl infatuation possible longer association for life missed it else we could have been a different couple for life
and sure enough a different birds pair for strife
Will this much suffice
Geezer
Tue, 2022-02-01 09:34
I get it...
I'm sure that many people play that game with themselves; what might have been. I have had a few of those moments myself. I guess it's a case of "Could've, would have, should have. I like this one, short, sweet and no dying! LoL
Nice job! ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Tue, 2022-02-01 12:14
yeah thanks
birds of a feather fling to gather
no dying GEE brother
lol
Obadiah Grey
Tue, 2022-02-01 14:07
I'm with you all the way with
I'm with you all the way with regard to missed 'romantic" opportunities,
always seemed to be one step behind and doing the foxtrot
whilst she was tangoing off into the distance with the splendid greasy wop,
whom, it must be said was a far better dancer than I, though,
said 'Wop" never quite mastered the Hokey Pokey like I did,
and as such, missed out on many a tangled leg.
I like this one Lovedly,
I can ( as Geezer said) see myself in it !!
well done.
Obi.
lovedly
Tue, 2022-02-01 15:29
OBI
YOU make me feel like a shy lady
and
why not maybe
never ask any
the sky is blue
you too
but of a different hue
wooooowhooooooooo
come and dance with me
will you too