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SILENCE THREAT

Submitted by Jackweb on Tue, 2022-12-06 15:58

a sophisticated silence
scuttled away my peace
pierced my giant hope
I am now a living danger
planted in the sands of time

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Lavender

Tue, 2022-12-06 17:21

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Hi, Jackweb,
I find this to be very stirring. One of your best!
Peace to you,
L

Jackweb

Tue, 2022-12-06 22:36

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Always thankful for stopping by.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-12-06 18:31

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that your life isn't in danger because of your political views. Nice work, it makes one reflect on our world and the dangers of speaking out in some countries. Stay safe. ~ Geez.
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Jackweb

Tue, 2022-12-06 22:39

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Always thankful for stopping by. I'm save Gee ...
.thank you all!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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