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Sick Again...Part Deux

Picking my head up
From off my desk
Reaching for the bottle
A bitter pill to swallow
My memory's eraser
Found in different flavors
What will it be tonight
Saying no gets harder
Saying yes is a trigger
If only there was
A better answer
Favorite poison of mine

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Not Explicit Content

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Love it Carrie!
Just noticed no punctuation along with capped first letter makes for an additional challenge.
OK thinking on it,
Mark

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the way that you capitalized each line and left no punctuation. It felt like each line was a statement unto itself! It made it feel even more powerful. Great stuff! ~ Geez.
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I feel like punctuation interrupts the flow and other times it seems to bring something to the poem. Glad you enjoyed. This has been a fun challenge.

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I enjoyed this very much. sometimes punctuation feels too heavy to Carry.

*hugs, Cat

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I agree.

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