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Sick Again...Part Deux
Picking my head up
From off my desk
Reaching for the bottle
A bitter pill to swallow
My memory's eraser
Found in different flavors
What will it be tonight
Saying no gets harder
Saying yes is a trigger
If only there was
A better answer
Favorite poison of mine
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
mark
Tue, 2022-07-26 22:31
Favorite poison of mine
Love it Carrie!
Just noticed no punctuation along with capped first letter makes for an additional challenge.
OK thinking on it,
Mark
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RoseBlack
Tue, 2022-07-26 22:47
Thanks Mark
I look forward to your contribution. I think this challenge is quite fun.
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author commentGeezer
Tue, 2022-07-26 23:40
I like...
the way that you capitalized each line and left no punctuation. It felt like each line was a statement unto itself! It made it feel even more powerful. Great stuff! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
Wed, 2022-07-27 08:07
Sometimes
I feel like punctuation interrupts the flow and other times it seems to bring something to the poem. Glad you enjoyed. This has been a fun challenge.
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author commentCandlewitch
Wed, 2022-07-27 06:51
dear RoseBlack,
I enjoyed this very much. sometimes punctuation feels too heavy to Carry.
*hugs, Cat
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RoseBlack
Wed, 2022-07-27 08:07
Thanks Cat
I agree.
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