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Sick Again pt # 4 (round robin)

Sick Again pt #4 ?

this separation of body from mind, pieces like a jigsaw
there goes my right arm as I reach for a glass to fill with orange juice
(forget the glass, drink straight from carton)icy cold, I take giant gulps of this nectar from the gods
Ice Cream Headache! too much, too soon! Now belly vengeance, quick, to the bathroom...
just in the nick of time. i only trampled three old ladies in getting here. grab the wastepaper basket.
cold throne, I am planted, holding basket on my lap like a treasure which I am about to defile!
hot and cold, running at both ends... no surprise here... I might not have made it to the porcelain...
"think about that, you @sshole" I berate myself, as I have often done before. I wonder if I will be
invited back there again? I only made a small swamp of their guest bathroom... I supposed I should
have tried harder to clean it up? and when I ran short on toilet paper, I should not have used the
curtain to finish my "wipe"but I'm sure it will come out in the wash...slapping hand to red face...
probably wiping on the family cat, wasn't a good idea!

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Hugging the porcelain bus is never fun and I'm sure the cat will forgive u for wiping on them.

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I guess that you weren't out of the loop very long? A marvelous job! I couldn't stop laughing! I love the half-finished lines, that made it sound as if you were as dicombobulated as you indicated. Snarf, snarf, OMFG! Funny shit! ~ Geez.
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your reaction has me howling!!! I doubt my hostess and host are laughing >{^*;*^}<

thanks, Geez, you made it worth while!

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I have absolutely coated the interior of at least three different vehicles, never mine. The disconnected thinking is totally like being belligerent beyond capacity.

Super funny and very authentic,
Tim

your comment is the cherry on the cake of my day, lol

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Overdoing it lol there is a scar on my upper lip from running blindly and smashing my face into a table. The stupid things children do huh?
You brought it back in a big way :~)
Later,
Mark

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I guess I exaggerated a bit...but not by much!

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