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SHAKING OFF DUST

Dust puffs beneath my well worn boots
with every weary step I take.
Once in a while a sharp pain shoots
from knees which are recently fake.

I've walked so many unpaved lanes,
avoiding asphalt when I could.
This way is steep above the plains
but I guess still moving is good.

A huge hickory sends welcome shade
on, this, a warm mid autumn day
across the road from a wild glade.
Ere long its leaves will float away.

So I cross road ditch to sit down
and lean against grey scaly bark
then gaze into its soaring crown
and listen to a meadow lark.

It takes a while to catch my breath.
I smile back at my younger days
years when I never thought of death.
A time grown dim through years' thick haze.

The buzz of late fall honey bees
almost lures me into slumber
till I'm brought to by an errant breeze
and decide to go on with my lumber.

So with stiff joints I slowly rise,
take a sip from my old canteen
and swat at a couple of deer flies
whose eyes mock me with their deep green.

My truck awaits beyond the bend.
With it will end this day's short roam.
Some other day will hold my end
when some country road will take me home.

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fine way to make light of but still to feature feelings about limbs wearing out. Like the way you keep going forward on new roads.

The going forward is sometimes difficult but it's either that or stop in place and wither. Appreciate your time to read and comment.......stan

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we keep going, because we don't know to do anything else. I don't think that it is a conscious thing for some of us. Just something we do. Only crit I have, is that the last line of the fifth stanza says; " A time grown dim, through time's thick haze". You have "time" twice in the same line, maybe you could use a different word? Like [place, spot, etc.] ~ Gee.
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I didn't spot that code repeat and will remedy it now. Thanks for the eagle eye

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