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Seren

Submitted by Candlewitch on Tue, 2023-02-21 07:12

little star
of the far southwest.
lunar child, sun kissed
and star blessed.
her iridescent smile
bespeaks the glory
of centuries to be
and of spirits passed.
her heart is
a blooming desert,
celebrating the cactus flower.
she is both sunrise and sunset
and best;
my sister of lifting veils...
little star,
please shine and smile for me?

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How was my language use?

What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Contest:

Neopoem Of The Week February 19th to February 25th 2023

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Tue, 2023-02-21 08:50

Super job

She is all of those things. If there was ever a doubt we are born of stars, I think she would put that to rest fairly quickly.

Tim

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-22 08:08

thanks, Tim

She is one of the best people I have ever known. but then, so are you!

*hugs & love, Cat

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Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2023-02-22 12:55

Aww

I’m thoroughly flattered.

Tim

Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-02-23 05:50

;) hey Tim, we are all glad

;) hey Tim, we are all glad you are here!

*love & hugs, Cat

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Seren

Thu, 2023-02-23 06:33

I'll second that with a ditto

I'll second that with a ditto!!, you've become a part of our Neo family and I for one am glad you're with us.

Hugs Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Seren

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:14

Dearest One

You have no idea how touched I am. Big rolly polly tears are falling down my face and I am honoured that you would write such a magical poem for me.

It has been a really tough night and to come home to this was the balm my broken heart needed.

I absolutely love it!!! ALL.

It's an honour thank you so much.

Love you always and you have all my respect what a magnificent human being you are Sis, Lilbit xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-22 08:14

dear Lilbit,

I am a toad compared to you. you are a light unto yourself and I love you dearly, I hope you know that. you are a shining example of a bit of heaven!

*love & hugs, your Cat

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Seren

Wed, 2023-02-22 21:14

Dearest One

Well the poem I am writing tells a very different story. Thank you so much for your kind words they are a balm as you know. I'm as flawed and broken as they come.

Love you very much Lilbit

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Candlewitch

Sat, 2023-02-25 06:25

dear Lilbit,

when you are feeling flawed and broken, you must come to us, we love you and hope to bolster you up. and we are good listeners for when you are feeling blue...

*much love, Siscat

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-21 13:50

True tribute...

to one of our premier poets and friends. Wonderful sentiments from a beautiful person. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-22 08:18

dear Geez,

thank you for your kindness to me :) I am so glad you liked it. she is so beautiful, a shining soul! and so are you!
*hugs & love, Cat

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Dalton

Tue, 2023-02-21 16:37

Dearest Cat

From one beautiful poetic heart to another I pray for both of you to always be happy regards John :):):)

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-22 08:32

thank you beautiful soul,

for reading and your lovely comment!

*hugs & love, Cat

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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-22 08:14

Superb

Seren is absolutely all of these things. She is a valued member of the site as well as a wonderful friend. You captured her beautifully within this poem. Bravo!

~RoseBlack~

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-22 08:35