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Searching For Job

Two months searching for a job
To take care of home and family
To stand out among friends;
For want of a job-
My qualification was low
And my age was old
Under the sun I begged
If I didn’t have qualification
I would have been working
More than seconds, then
Slowly when it’s dusk, as if
I’m a clock.

My certificate was not my pride
But my skill was the need he wanted

Do you have two years’ experience?
Experience!
When I didn’t secure a job,
How would I have experience?
Mr. Man, excuse me, he said.

A lady walked in
Blinking her artificial pupils
Curled on her seat like a worm,
Manager I need a job, she said
Without hesitation, you’ve gotten a job.
On my heels
I was shame and asked
Why I’m created man
To take up responsibilities?

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Two months searching for(a) job (insert a)
Do( you’ve) two years’ experience? (you have)
Blinking her artificial pupils (blinking her artificial lashes) pupils don't blink!

it is a frustrating situation: how can you get experience, if no one is willing to give you a job?!

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