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Sal Dare, Sub Luna

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Sun, 2023-02-26 13:58

Self control is holy currency
with which one can buy the world.
Hold the power over feelings
yet validate their pain;
their joy.
Kindness knows boundaries.
Families do too.
Inner peace is costly;
should be guarded with vigilance,
while being enjoyed ravenously,
never squandered into thankless hands.
Callous clutches will never hold tranquility
as long as the sun rises and sets.
Cruel words, like crooked arrows
will never find a target
in the heart of the self aware
or ever reach inviting shores
or favorable tides
under the blessings of the loving moon.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
To give salt under the moon
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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RoseBlack

Sun, 2023-02-26 15:20

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In this poem. Self control/awareness and boundaries are so important. Your poems always have words of wisdom and I love all of it. Thank you.

~RoseBlack~

Candlewitch

Sun, 2023-02-26 17:22

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is what I have in abundance. it is the beat of what Steven and I disagree. He thinks sometimes that it is stubbornness on my part. I really loved your poem.

*hugs, Cat

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Geezer

Sun, 2023-02-26 21:07

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nothing better than self-control. You make a very good case for controlling one's environment. ~ Geez...
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Ekaterina Alexa...

Mon, 2023-02-27 02:53

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Hey Tim,
I really love this! The part about guarding inner peace is 100% true! It's so easy to lose. Interesting title- what does it mean?
As always, a pleasure to read your work. Well done Xxx

Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2023-02-27 05:01

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Salt has been traded as currency and valued as long as history goes back. The word “salary” comes from the Latin word sal meaning “salt”. Roman legionaries may have been given some of their wages in the form of salt. Probably where the saying “not worth his salt” comes from.

Tim

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Mark

Mon, 2023-02-27 03:10

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I don't know which one will win at times.
Hi Tim, I'm at a loss for the first part of your title. Is it a name? Other than English I can't find another language for it and it has the dictionary stumped as well. So do tell please.
The last 4 lines are my favorites,

Mark

"The artist is a receptacle for emotions that come from all over the place: from the sky, from the earth, from a scrap of paper, from a passing shape... " (Picasso)

Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-02-28 07:35

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self-control is such a big part of my everyday life. it gives me dominance over my physical pain. my favorite lines of your poem are:

in the heart of the self aware
or ever reach inviting shores
or favorable tides
under the blessings of the loving moon.

* love & hugs, Cat

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