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THE RISK OF LOVE

Submitted by Jackweb on Thu, 2022-12-08 06:33

Your love connotes
endless entanglement
I'm finding way to exit
your feeling is a hot fire
I can't quench your craving

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-08 06:43

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sounds to hot to handle! best to let it go, lol.

all my best, Cat

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Jackweb

Thu, 2022-12-08 08:32

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Beautiful answer! Thanks Cat for stopping by.
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Geezer

Thu, 2022-12-08 09:19

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someone who can't stand their lover being out of their sight. A person that has need of constant reassurance. I like the hot, hurried feel to this, as if a too hot flame and feeling of suffocation. Good write! ~ Geez.
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Jackweb

Thu, 2022-12-08 11:20

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You really got it right! Humble thanks for reading through and commenting.
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Jackweb

Thu, 2022-12-08 14:37

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LoL! Much appreciated for reading and commenting.
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Rula

Thu, 2022-12-08 14:22

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Make me smile for some reason.
I'm a fan of crispy words. :)

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Jackweb

Thu, 2022-12-08 14:40

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Sometimes one need to delve into different style of creative writing. Much appreciated for stopping here.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

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Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2022-12-09 10:34

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An infatuation turned stifling.

Amazing
Tim

Jackweb

Fri, 2022-12-09 11:32

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Thanks a bunch for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

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Emerald1

Sat, 2022-12-17 09:51

The piece almost reads as someone in a panic to escape from under a suffocating blanket of love . a clever powerful brevity like it , the meaning is clear and the word choices evoke the picture of panic ,

Jackweb

Sat, 2022-12-17 18:41

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You're very right ! Thanks for your evaluation.
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