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requited Rose

Roses never die
let alone weep

All my life
I have sung praises
for roses

O Rose,
do pose
with a rose

My Valentine
be mine
with a Rose...

and

on lapels of Kings and Queens
Ah! Many worlds’ ministers
Rose was the flower

Roses are never ever dead,
in the far phases of eternity
in sweeter memories
we all but roses see

We know now for certain
roses lay in library books
the original fragrance of
a memory of the one
who gave you
one

PUSH THIS ASIDE
Unrequited Rose

Roses never die
let alone weep

all my life
I have sung praises
for only roses
miss

O Rose,
do pose
with a rose

My Valentine
be mine
with a Rose...

and

on lapels of Kings and Queens
Ah! many worlds’ ministers
Rose was the only flower
my dear sister..

So take it from me
roses when red
are never ever dead,

in the far phases of eternity
in sweeter memories
we all but roses see

we know now for certain
roses lay in library books
with original fragrance
a rosy memory of the one
who ever gave you
my friendly one,
ONE!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 

Comments

if you got rid of the repetitions and waffle
Get to work, then I''ll show you mine, if you like (edit, I mean lol)
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

this one has been lying lazy in neopoetry
now tis time for Valentine may be
waffling still i will brush it
Got up early its snowing coldly

author comment

I'll do this in answer to you asking me to, on my write about the honesty flower

but you have to start recognising your own waffle.... there may be things you are trying to say that I am cutting out. so you shouldn't just take the edit I do per se - you need to think it out for yourself...

i've been doing it long enough now, in the hope you would be taking notice.... lessons end, and exams begin :)

Roses never die
let alone weep

All my life
I have sung praises
for roses

O Rose,
do pose
with a rose

My Valentine
be mine
with a Rose...

and

on lapels of Kings and Queens
Ah! Many worlds’ ministers
Rose was the flower

Roses are never ever dead,
in the far phases of eternity
in sweeter memories
we all but roses see

We know now for certain
roses lay in library books
the original fragrance of
a memory of the one
who gave you
one

------------------
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I will be blessed
with such an ability
to judge
what waffle tis
God may wish!

author comment

butterfly kisses

I love kisses and butterflies
and
all girls and guys
who smile

the air we breathe does purify
when a candle burns its lover
the butter fly
which then fails to fly high
as in the arms of its lover
she wishes to die

that's a sweet butter fly

author comment
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