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RECLINED MUSING

Sitting not so late at night
in my worn reclining chair,
moon through the window shining bright,
new home settling here and there.

Cool spring air comes through the screen
embracing this old southern man
with familiar scents and sounds unseen
soothing me as it, only, can.

The radio is turned down low
with oldies from my days of youth
before I saw first forest grow,
before I'd learned a single truth.

But the years first whippoorwill
is crying out for a spring fling
near the top of the front hill.
He'll flutter through the night and sing.

And the privet hedge is in full bloom
spreading musk to my big nose
while I sit in this dim lit room
as dying fire's coals pop and glow.

With eyes closed i soak all in
the scents, the sounds, the atmosphere.
Then just before the dreams begin
I thank god that I'm still here.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I know it's pretty rank so let me have it lol
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It really sets a tranquil mood. One slight point, two whiles on consecutive lines. Maybe consider something like as for one of them.

Keith Logan
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Appreciate both the visit and eagle eye. I'll get that fixed now.......stan

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I like this gentle, evocotive poem. It paints a vivid picture.
There is something, to me anyway, that doesn't quite flow in this stanza.

'But the years first whippoorwill
is crying out for a spring fling
near the top of the front hill.
He'll flutter through the night and sing.'

Not sure what it is yet, will get back to you.
But really a suft and comforting poem.
Jx

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Thank you. i Have been accused of writing gently before lol. Enough turmoil in the real world so i often try to give folks refuge.Now as to that stanza, is it using "front" to describe the hill in front of my home?......stan

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