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Reaching Out

Stuck again inside my mind
Thoughts will hold me captive there
The more I search, the less I find
Futile hands left grasping air

The feelings and the anger swirl
Through the maelstrom I must sail
I hope my vessel’s large enough
Or something comes to my avail

This happens to me all the time
I’ve finally found by reaching out
My friends will place their hand in mine
When I am drowning in self doubt

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Good morning, Tim,
I believe this is one of your best pieces - it feels so genuine and sincere, vulnerable, yet with a direct and head-on approach. You seem so aware of these feelings and how best to respond to them. This may have been an alarming moment, but you have mastered it and turned it into a gentle wave instead of a major storm. The reference to hands throughout is creative and effectual. Great poetry. I hope you look back on this piece when things stir up in your mind again. I know it inspires me.
Thank you!
L

sometimes, it's a subtle thing, a lot of people don't want to make a fuss and consequently find excuses not to or do so in a manner so as not to directly ask for help. Other's think that asking for a little help and/or advice, means that they are weak.
Personally, I find that when people ask for advice /help it takes more courage than being silent and braving it alone, and it also shows that they have a will to survive. Your title is apt and perfectly describes the action. The language use is good and not a lot of big words that you have to think about. The rhythm, pattern and pacing are very good, and I like the theme. Check your messages ~Geez.
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Thought derails one's happiness. Never give up in reaching out to friends in need.
Don't rely on my hands when you are falling
When I couldn't fix myself
At the circle where you will locate me.

Grap the air... It's hope!

"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."

I had experienced such moments of time in my life. Our thoughts have the capacity to hold us bound, especially when you're trying to stop such thought coming by; and it would continue flashing in your memory.
The first stanza resonates with me. Nothing more than to say, you have crafted beautifully. Good job!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

To feel utterly grateful for every word. Your kind words and honest criticism are invaluable. Likewise, I am very happy to read and comment. If I see something I think could be better I try and make those suggestions and I’ve seen my critique put to practice and that’s rewarding too. To be perfectly honest, before I found the site, there were only two people who ever had opportunity to read what I was writing but some things were telling me really strongly to pursue. When you find an audience that’s huge, to have an audience of peers is magic.

Glad to have found an audience,
Tim

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An honest, vulnerable piece I believe most of us can relate to. Having friends to help pull us through those times are so important. Your pieces are a beautiful mixture of love, honesty and reality. Thank you for sharing your deepest thoughts and concerns with us through them.

~RoseBlack~

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