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Random Challenge #12 [The Neighborhood I Grew up In].

Submitted by Geezer on Sun, 2022-02-06 15:04

We had our little cliques and routines
A dozen or so of us
We had those of us that walked to school
and some that took the bus

We were all growing up in those days
Mostly of different persuasions
We could see beneath the skin
To the heart pumping blood to our abrasions

We were of white and black and brown
We fought and had our spats
But we always made up, shaking hands
Wearing our team's baseball hats

I wish to go back to those days
Never nearing the racial divide
Those days of the old neighborhood
Where we lived with grins that were wide

So, let's find our way back to respect
Make peace with the world at large
Call each other brother again
Take back our world, be in charge

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How does this theme appeal to you?
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Editing - draft
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Neopoet Random Challenge #12
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Not Explicit Content

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Ray Whitaker

Thu, 2022-02-10 13:22

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A nice poem, as I've come to realize that you are incredibly capable of.

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Geezer

Fri, 2022-02-11 08:35

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is kind of rough, and someday I may get back to it and smooth it out. I am glad that I did capture the feel of the old neighborhood. Thank you for your overly generous praise. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Sun, 2022-02-20 15:43

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the theme does catch my interest. and it takes me back... to North Mpls and worse, North High School. during the Black/White race riots. I had a ten block walk, crossing the boundaries of Broadway St. and Girard Ave. I understood the Black issues and agreed with them but I didn't want to lose my education over it which is exactly what happened due to escalation: people being pulled off of buses, girls being raped in the school itself. I quit the tenth grade because of intolerance on both parties. (got my GED later and an associates degree in electronics) I had a couple of buddies and we watched each others backs.

your poem triggered alot of memories...which good poetry is supposed to do...I can hardly wait for you to polish up and make it great!!!

*hugs, Cat and eddy

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-02-20 16:07

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It may be some time before I get back to it, but I am just getting back some of my ambition. Killer has been kind of uncommunicative lately and I'm not sure of what he is up to. So, I have been trying to busy myself until he's in a better mood.
I feel that there are a number of things that I can accomplish, and hopefully once Killer has worked out his issues eddy and he can get together and have an adventure. Thanks for the read and comment. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Sun, 2022-02-20 16:42

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best wishes Killer.

I hope you get your energy back soon. I will be waiting... anything I can do to help? just let me know!

*ever, eddy styx

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