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Quest of a shooting star

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2017-06-30 16:28

Quest of a shooting star

The sun has just set
but set me ablaze

from the distant horizon
it wanted me to erase
a light of spark
that I could have been
now I age

but folks
let me remain on the stage
as I have yet to age
says a dying sage

the shooting star is then fired
into nothingness
a message it conveys
sooner than later
you will also follow me
why then the delay

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Scatterhatter

Sat, 2017-07-01 01:21

So go on
shoot a star into the sun
make the beginning
Begun
Run run run run
Follow that light of spark
to a closer fired horizon
its no longer dark

lovedly

Sat, 2017-07-01 02:02

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run

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Captain

Sun, 2017-07-02 18:46

Captain's picture

This is cool! I feel like its a metaphor for something in me...especially the first 2 lines.

lovedly

Sun, 2017-07-02 23:25

lovedly's picture

But you said you were not a Captain
may be wanted to be on a Naval ship
may be a Captain of neopoets
POETRY
MAYbe...
okay in May then
a
Captain you will be

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