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Of Queens and Kings

We sat facing each other
I thought the conversation to be ephemeral
Till Ganja and a few sips of espresso
When our words became enduring
As the feeling of our love
As a child’s first venture into the forest
The wonderment
For she was then my Queen

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Free verse
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The poem "Of Queens and Kings" presents a vivid narrative, but there are a few areas where it could be improved.

Firstly, the structure of the poem could be more consistent. The lines vary greatly in length and rhythm, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. Experimenting with a more consistent structure might help to enhance the overall rhythm and flow of the poem.

Secondly, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery. While there are some strong images, such as "a child’s first venture into the forest" and "the wonderment", these could be expanded upon to create a more immersive experience for the reader.

The use of the terms "Ganja" and "espresso" are intriguing, suggesting a specific setting or context, but this could be developed further to give the reader a better understanding of the situation and characters.

Lastly, the poem ends with the line "For she was then my Queen", which seems to suggest a change in the relationship between the two characters. However, this change is not fully explored in the poem. Expanding on this could add depth to the narrative and make the ending more impactful.

Overall, the poem shows promise, but could be improved with more consistent structure, expanded imagery, more context, and a more developed narrative.

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I think that what you are saying in this piece, is that you were introduced to Ganja by an older woman?
Good story. ~ Geez.

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An introduction.
Thanks Geez,

read/comment it's a win win
I was here now I disappear..

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Hello, Mark,
I feel the wonder and the revelation!
Very nice!

That's great to know,

read/comment it's a win win
I was here now I disappear..

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