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Purity and Inclusivity (White)

Swan’s reflection on mirrored pond
Pine boughs laden with snow
Linens of infinite thread count
Blanket things you’ll never know

Who sees the mind and heart of brides
May see her walk the aisle
Symbols stand in purity
Loving mother, newborn child

I’m with you when I walk in light
Illumination so divine
Shows me to my inner self
So that I may control my mind

Inclusive light on prism breaks
To spectrum it divides
Now all the colors visible
Hand in hand, stand side by side

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Structured: Western
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Comments

Such a serene, peaceful write. The kind that makes you want to curl up with a warm blanket and read more. Excellent flow and language.

~RoseBlack~

given me a vision of myself sitting on a window-ledge with a 5th grade science book and a prism. I had my lunch, [I remember
peanut butter and jelly and a cup of tea]. A warm Spring day, on the second floor, doing my homwork for Monday. You brought that home to me in just this little piece of work! Thank you for a sixty-something yr. old memeory! ~ Geez.
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it is such peaceful and serene landscaping: you could hold wedding services here. pristine! this is a perfect write for white! this poem it is hard to chose favorite lines as they are all integral to the whole. I very much enjoyed this write.

*hugs, Cat

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