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PRAY FOR ME BROTHER

She asked me to pray again
since first week of May
barely nearing a month.
she had to go for a surgery
the next day
she went
docs said they won't

she continued to fall daily
yelling at me
o brother keep praying
Lord will listen to thee.
In every prayer

to whom have I to
but to keep her confidence
I prayed within

What can prayer do
I ask of you
when ICU guys say
nothing can they now do

She like any human
born and immensely loved
hoped for a bit
more of it

Life on earth is lovely
she knew it

Then left her requests
in the forest of life
and
went away just yesterday

brother after I go
learn to pray

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dear lovedly,

this is a very expressive poem, showing love and lost hope. it is heart-wrenching to read. I am so sorry for you pain. In some very troubled times I prayed that something would stop happening to me. I was answered with silence. so I no longer believe in the christian god.

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

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is an acknowledgment that there is something more than this life here in the world. I find that I cannot address my "prayers"
to any particular god, but instead, the universe at large. I just throw them at the world beyond and hope that at least some of them make it through the veil. I do this to ask for things that are for others; my nephew's struggle with alcoholism, my great nephew's battle with seizures, a friends' trials and tribulations, and of course, the occasional plea to win the Lotto, [A good car would be nice]. I think that the universe listens, but rarely responds, as it already has its' own plan for us. Your piece here, shows that. Your write shows the pain of losing someone, and the realization that it is for the best. The mark of a truly good person, who understands and can put it in writing. ~ Geez.
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excellent!!!

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desire hope happiness while we live as friends Gee you and I Thanks you are a marvel for all distraught neos one is lovedly the person has reached eternity
did you read my poem where
ETERNITY MEETS INFINITY
Thanks Gee for holding me

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A Poem For Lovedly

hush now it is the quiet hour
take my hand and we will walk,
under trees and clearing skies
take a moment and we will talk.

of your heartache so new
and of the lingering sorrow,
just know that my wishes for you
for happiness and a bright tomorrow.

soon the clouds will pass
as the sun comes peeking through,
be patient dear heart, here it comes;
you will now see skies a brilliant blue.

by: Cat

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I NOW feel FAITH DESIRE AND PRAYER are central to all.
All we can do is to continue
as there is not much we can do

May your prayers and hard work continue.
FOR The lovely poem thank you.
Lovedly

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you are very welcome. would you believe that eddy styx helped with the poem?

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

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in whatever we believe
and you do Cats

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Please post it it will be so kind of you

Many compose poems on/for me

Am I lovably so true
Thank you
Now I'm no more in blue

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I will post it. I'm so glad you liked it!

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

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