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Poems for all Seasons

Submitted by Blue-eyed Bolla on Wed, 2023-05-31 06:04

In spring, I wake with rosy-fingered dawn,
and pen my lines as dew drops grace the lawn.
By dusk, when blood-red moon begins to bleed,
my sorrow-laden lines I dare not read.

In summer, poems pour out of my soul,
released from county jail - out on parole.
They lie, like lines of laughing liberty,
hysterical to be at last set free!

Autumnal lines may fall, but will not flow.
They rot inside me, then mutate and grow,
until I’m large with child of pregnant prose:
these still-born poems, damned, do decompose.

In winter, sometimes Heaven touches Earth,
and angel’s breath does bless with new-born birth
pure poems, rich, with rare, romantic rhyme.
Inspired by Muse's sweetness, so sublime.

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Last few words:

...Sometimes my pen is quiet as a quill. And sonnets, so serene, do simply spill upon the parchment or papyrus page, wise words, as well as wonderful, like sage.

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neopoet

Wed, 2023-05-31 12:10

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem "Poems for all Seasons". Your poem is a beautiful reflection of the different seasons and how they affect your writing. The use of imagery in the first stanza is particularly effective in setting the scene for the rest of the poem.

In terms of feedback, I would suggest considering the use of punctuation to enhance the flow and rhythm of the poem. For example, in the first line of the second stanza, a comma after "soul" could help to create a pause and emphasize the release of the poems. Additionally, in the third stanza, consider using a colon after "prose" to create a stronger connection between the two lines.

Overall, your poem is well-written and thought-provoking. Keep up the good work!

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Lavender

Wed, 2023-05-31 17:36