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Peace Come Over

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2023-02-11 03:53

There is really no peace
while living
we live piece by piece
till we are on our way to heaven

that alone is heavenly grace
on mommy Earth
to live silently a life of beauty
one must as ought to continue to play
in a heavenly way
so try not to dismay

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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lovedly

Sat, 2023-02-11 05:39

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are you really from UK England ?

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lovedly

Sat, 2023-02-11 09:54

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so judge poet as u wish lol

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Seren

Sun, 2023-02-12 11:15

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I really love this snippet of a poem I think you're only getting better, and it seems like you're growing at a rapid rate,

I only have one suggestion, Mommy Earth? I'd write Mother Earth.

I know you have your own way with words and if you don't like my suggestion that's totally OK.

Love and big hugs Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Sun, 2023-02-12 11:58

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MISSISSIPPI
KINDLY let MUMMY stay with me she is calling daily When are you coming I'm tired of waiting OK any day now dearest MOMMY
Keep smiling

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sun, 2023-02-12 14:11

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Truth in a beautiful box. Thanks Lovedly

Tim

lovedly

Mon, 2023-02-13 00:51

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For reading me
hope you will continue

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