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Peace Again

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Mon, 2023-03-06 06:28

Resting heart beat, tranquil mind
Releasing worries undefined
Ripples dissipate with time
Carry off dark thoughts sublime

When the surface becomes glass
Wind is still, no stone is cast
See the bottom through the skies
Reflected in my double’s eyes

In that moment did appear
A single, solitary tear
Dripped from my eye into mine
To the mirror it declined
Upon arrival, surface bends
Leaving ripples once again

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Seren

Mon, 2023-03-06 08:08

Tim

Profound doesn't begin to touch the meaning of the last stanza

Wow. Bravo!

Cheers Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Geezer

Mon, 2023-03-06 10:25

one of my favorites of yours! The ripples left in the mirror, will spread out and fade slowly, hopefully, before we forget the
reason for them in the first place. Beautiful lines:
" Resting heartbeat, tranquil mind
.Releasing worries undefined
.Ripples dissipate with time
.Carry off dark thoughts sublime"
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

RoseBlack

Mon, 2023-03-06 18:22