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Peace
Kneeling
as the curtains of time
slipped to drift
in the river of days,
my eyes sighed tears
and my heart
cupped to capture
its communion
praying
as the folds of hours
enveloped and draped
to pool, over hands
in humilities hold,
as each whisper
travelled mere moments
to awaken a Star
unknowingly
my words
had filigreed to glimmer
in milli seconds of wonder,
and the Sapphire dome
now shimmers to mirror
a future enthralled
at peace
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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Beyond the Black Stump..Australia
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Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...
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Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2012-08-24 07:49
If only,
If only it was that easy to capture some peace in this world of trouble. Beautiful well written poem. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
Seren
Sun, 2012-08-26 05:43
I really believe that our
I really believe that our world will not find peace until we can all be at peace in ourselves thanks for the read its much appreciated
regards JC
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
author commentIan.T
Fri, 2012-08-24 09:00
Seren
A beautifully penned piece of writing, it sounds as if you have found something precious to the mind..
Lovely to see you there, what a welcome sight,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Sun, 2012-08-26 05:41
ello my friend
thanks for the read and the kind words
this one is still in need of much work
hope your both well
love always JC
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
author commentSeren
Sun, 2012-08-26 05:40
Thanks for the read and
Thanks for the read and review its lovely to see you still around will get round and have a good read of some poems tonight ... hope your both well
hugs JC
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
author commentweirdelf
Sat, 2012-08-25 21:53
It's a terrible poem
What's happened to you? Your best work was superb.
No, sorry, it's not terrible. I just expect better of you. This feels like you are "trying to be poetic". I can't give more constructive feedback than that right now.
cheers,
Jess
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Seren
Sun, 2012-08-26 05:38
it is an old poem rewritten
it is an old poem rewritten its still growing and changing at the moment
I am going over my poems and editting them ....
good to see you ,,,
cheers JC
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
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